tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1735446301837589358.post5418896659187929703..comments2023-11-03T09:04:26.994-04:00Comments on A Thing for Words: Vespers IIJoseph Heschhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13217169295029029233noreply@blogger.comBlogger16125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1735446301837589358.post-58727111931786663682011-04-18T09:51:13.496-04:002011-04-18T09:51:13.496-04:00I really enjoyed this, particularly, “Jingling win...I really enjoyed this, particularly, “Jingling wind chimes announce the huffing passage of a Jack Russell terrier.” While there’s a weight to the poem, the ever-present pull against the leash, you leave a sense of hope with the reader that tomorrow is another day filled with birdsong and the possibility of breaking free from the ties that bind. Nice!Cathttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17855774802992759787noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1735446301837589358.post-72048020675144806412011-04-15T21:46:42.483-04:002011-04-15T21:46:42.483-04:00Lovely poem. There's the imagery of pulling aw...Lovely poem. There's the imagery of pulling away from gravity, but also of being the center of gravity, having to hold things together,Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1735446301837589358.post-59904036849421934212011-04-14T01:05:34.181-04:002011-04-14T01:05:34.181-04:00love the metaphors but i could only picture my bos...love the metaphors but i could only picture my boston terrier in there, but yes, jack russell is more appropriate. <br /><br />really liked the phraseology in ths:<br /><br />"always hoping to break from just a little <br />of the gravity that holds me captive to a life"Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1735446301837589358.post-69865171997167072322011-04-13T19:24:10.423-04:002011-04-13T19:24:10.423-04:00nice piece, Joe. The descriptive passages are what...nice piece, Joe. The descriptive passages are what really make this one for me. The dog, the birds, the dog's owner. You really took me there, to dusk.<br /><br />regards<br /><br />Luke @ WordSaladLuke Praterhttp://lukepraterswordsalad.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1735446301837589358.post-86457991792774626072011-04-13T18:39:52.775-04:002011-04-13T18:39:52.775-04:00What a lovely poem. Can just picture that hyper li...What a lovely poem. Can just picture that hyper little Jack Russell running circles around his master (as we have one in our neighborhood that does the same each day). I liked how your turned this around into a metaphor for breaking free of your own circles and cycles. Really enjoyed reading (and rereading) this one.Ginny Brannanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15298060016652737538noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1735446301837589358.post-64567837258910317602011-04-13T13:43:36.185-04:002011-04-13T13:43:36.185-04:00sounds familiar to me joe...breaking free from the...sounds familiar to me joe...breaking free from the circles - not always easy - sometimes we have to take small steps..and a poem can be a good start..Claudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03011763027311966186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1735446301837589358.post-63573915062303066102011-04-13T12:39:41.452-04:002011-04-13T12:39:41.452-04:00Hi Joe - this doesn't really have to do with y...Hi Joe - this doesn't really have to do with your Vespers, but I wanted to thank you for reading my poem about Grandma and bread. You are so on the ball, I was still messing with the intro!Other Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09189646933597252108noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1735446301837589358.post-6848903628369656462011-04-13T08:23:28.237-04:002011-04-13T08:23:28.237-04:00What a long way you have come from the original ve...What a long way you have come from the original vespers. I like the metaphor of the celestial metaphors, and the step from the dog on the leash to your life.Other Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09189646933597252108noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1735446301837589358.post-21071946445452900042011-04-12T23:44:04.184-04:002011-04-12T23:44:04.184-04:00I really enjoyed the way you speak. It's disti...I really enjoyed the way you speak. It's distinct, and I liked the last two lines best.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01547380098561803645noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1735446301837589358.post-58929950547182730042011-04-12T23:37:16.654-04:002011-04-12T23:37:16.654-04:00I like Brian's description of a "poetic r...I like Brian's description of a "poetic romp"--it really fits this piece, though there is a lot of depth--and height--to it as well. Your language is crystalline as ever, and I love the astral metaphor and imagery!joannahttp://arspoetica.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1735446301837589358.post-56491740726013025242011-04-12T20:23:12.131-04:002011-04-12T20:23:12.131-04:00Again, you place us right there with you, living t...Again, you place us right there with you, living the moment with a smile on our faces. Enjoyed this so much, Joe!Tashtoohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15847190224960829574noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1735446301837589358.post-21829919654807008252011-04-12T18:00:10.033-04:002011-04-12T18:00:10.033-04:00nice...so this is the expanded version of yesterda...nice...so this is the expanded version of yesterday...i like it...an uplifting poetic romp...Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1735446301837589358.post-36725250319609051032011-04-12T17:50:47.882-04:002011-04-12T17:50:47.882-04:00super. and I'll never look at untrained dog o...super. and I'll never look at untrained dog on leash the same lol love the metaphor :)<br /><br />Monty / bummyMontyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17446385166445251013noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1735446301837589358.post-22285716827734622172011-04-12T17:49:23.610-04:002011-04-12T17:49:23.610-04:00Excellent use of metaphor. I was right there and a...Excellent use of metaphor. I was right there and am right there..wishing today not so many worlds on my shoulder too. Thanks, GayBeachannyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08638256396472533685noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1735446301837589358.post-28515892350150042962011-04-12T17:37:05.452-04:002011-04-12T17:37:05.452-04:00beautiful and full of hope.beautiful and full of hope.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05088944123595868347noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1735446301837589358.post-47601383628436053862011-04-12T17:25:28.542-04:002011-04-12T17:25:28.542-04:00Nicely done, vivid, clear writing. Love the satell...Nicely done, vivid, clear writing. Love the satellite metaphor.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com